When the air became so still
Barely knew where anything was.
Went around like a ghost
Talking to nobody
Yet lending the truth to a past
Two would have died to have forgotten.
Some were not born out of love
We were born from a hate most wouldn’t understand
Even if we explained it in detail.
You said it
When you failed to take notice of my damage
When you didn’t respond to my silent cries for help
When you walked away without once looking back
When you allowed a stranger to raise me
When you didn’t talk to me about drugs and alcohol
When nobody told me “I love you” could be used as a lie
I expected it
Because that is the way it has always been for me.
Lovely image, powerful moment in time captured in words. Love the repetition near the end. It sets the reader up for a powerful ending, but you should take another look at the ending if you revise, to see if you could capitalize a bit more on the repetition.
You are absolutely right. My ADD kicked in, and I went to another blog to write about something else. I’ll come back to this and revise. Thanks for the recommendation!